Saturday, October 30, 2010

Please review proof read my Essay On Diversity-Common App Maryland .

So basically I got lazy and am submiting the same essay for 3 different places since the prompts are alike, so please can you break each prompt and see if my essay answers all of them. Also can you tell direct me any parts or common grammar errors. (I'm very bad with grammer). Another thing is I did not begin with a specific prompt, I only tried to do all three.

lso I can take the essay longer for rutgers and common app, so please say me if I give to gain my essay length.Prompts 1. "The unit is greater than the sum of its parts." - AristotleThe intellectual, social and ethnic differences embraced by the University of Md are inherent to the framework of our community. The force of the University is accomplished through the contributions of every member of our campus. We see each person is a consequence of his/her personal background and experiences.Describe the parts that add up to the sum of you.300 word max) 2. Rutgers University is a vibrant community of masses with a broad diversity of backgrounds and experiences. How would you gain from and bring to such an environment? Consider variables such as your talents, travels, leadership activities, volunteer services, and cultural experiences. Only personal essays submitted via our site will be considered. You may introduce a maximum of 3800 characters including spaces.3. A range of academic interests, personal perspectives, and life experiences adds much to the educational mix. Given your personal background, describe an see that illustrates what you would bring to the variety in a college community, or an see that demonstrated the grandness of variety to you. (250 word min)My life. Sorry I can't really say anything about that. However, I can assure you around my lives. May go a cheesy, but it's true. My body holds two different personalities, each with its own set of values and interests. One when I'm with my family and One when I'm with my friends. I am the foremost individual of my house to work outside of India. I be at home with parents who have conservative and cultural values. As a result, I inherited their values, which have become an inherent piece of my home life. We see Bollywood movies, not Hollywood movies. Instead of strumming a Guitar, I learned to represent the Tabla. These values also made me developed a calm personality. As kids, my parents were taught to hear and teach to adults and not question. That's why I don't always question them. Instead I read from their wisdom.Away from family, I act differently. Amongst teacher and friends who are diverse I've learned to appreciate other personalities and interests, such as expressing my ideas and asking questions. I respect my teachers and other adults, but unlike with my parents I peak more freely and less formal with them. Also my personality is more fighting with the numerous clubs I enter in. College will be both my home and sphere of social attraction. Here my friends will be my family. As a solution my values at national and those at school will mix up. At the _________University name goes here________, where there is a diverse array of personalities and values, I will take my own values, personalities and interests which I developed at national and at school. Also I will watch the values and principles of my peers who I shall see at college.

Gagan Tunuguntla

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